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the Trap of my mind by =santa-satan:iconsanta-satan:





Pain-all that I feel is pain.  My bones are broken; my muscles are torn–I cannot move of my own free will.  I lay in a dark, dank room upon a concrete floor.  The only outlet in the room is a small hole in the center of the floor–I’m too far away to see into it.  How long have I been here?  I can’t remember.  There is blood on my head.  Blood and something else, though I'm not sure what.  Food comes every so often–I don’t know where it comes from–it just appears.  I’m starting to believe in majik again–it’s been a long time my old friend.  Noise-I think I hear something–no just the voices-always the voices.  My mind has turned on me–it tries to revolt, but I still have enough strength to fight its armies.  The voices tell me lies-they tell me no-one cares-all that they say is false-but why has no-one come?  Do I really not matter? Why am I alone?  Want to curl up into a ball, but I cant- my bones and muscles. Light-where is this light coming from-there’s so much light-its not good light though-its bad light.  I see familiar faces-cry out to them-but they just laugh and watch as I die-the laughing will never end.
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Submitted: January 27, 2004
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1/24/04

thought of my twisted mind
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Wonderful imagery. You managed to cause the reader to really think, really feel like they're in that situation. That's not easy to do, but you accomplished it. Nicely done.

This is also similar to my early work, 'Private Hell'. Especially the line: "I see familiar faces-cry out to them-but they just laugh and watch as I die-the laughing will never end. " It appears you and I have similar thoughts and fears.


:hug:

Nice job my friend.

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very descriptive. easy to sense the pain and turmoil you feel. i'm glad you acknowledge that the voices are lying. you know we all care. :hug: :hug: :reallybighug:
OMG...ouch, but why has no one come...that's what I want to know..or is it they have and I can't see them cuz I'm so in my head....these are my thoughts. It seems I'm not alone. Very well done. I felt so much pain while I read your work. You have the capacity to allow the reader to feel what you feel. That's only a product of truth. Go baby go.
lots of poems and short stories are written like this, with a lot of darkness. granted, this is how you feel, but i think the first step to start feeling better is to write the ending. the good part.

also, i've learned that you can't rely on people to come to you. most of the time you have to go to them. a few times, you meet them half-way. hardly ever, very rarely, they come to you.

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Artificial Intelligence is no substitute for Real Stupidity XD
thankyou :hug:, it is however unfortunate that i feel the pain that i write about. my pain is my muse

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viky/leila

sits alone in her own private hell until the day that she dies.
no one can save my forgotten soul...
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thanx for the hug

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viky/leila

sits alone in her own private hell until the day that she dies.
no one can save my forgotten soul...
:iconlivingpoetsociety:
??

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viky/leila

sits alone in her own private hell until the day that she dies.
no one can save my forgotten soul...
:iconlivingpoetsociety:
you know that we do....

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viky/leila

sits alone in her own private hell until the day that she dies.
no one can save my forgotten soul...
:iconlivingpoetsociety:
you have a gift of writing

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